Deal with It . Goes To a football match .
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Deal with It . Goes To a football match .
We can see JJ & Ryan eating some chips , going to their seats .
Suddenly JJ's phones starts to ring .
"Its on the Highway to HELL !"
JJ : Yes ? Yea where here ? Ow no problem well come to you , yes thank you .
he drops down his phone and smashes it ...
Ryan looks curiously at him ...
JJ : Nothing .
Ryan : Well .. lets go then ? Whats the problem?
JJ : Remember our last match ? Against Ed & Midwest ?
Ryan : Yea , easy match , those guys need to learn some moves too , before learning to talk .
JJ : Its not that , even that yer right , their there too , and their sitting right next to ours .
Ryan : Ow , hah ! Lets get them evacuated .
JJ : Calm , well see there .
After some moments , getting near their seats .
Ed & Midwest when sees them starts to get closer and talking about them pointing to them.
They see them and go near Sam , but they had no where to sit ...
Ryan : Okay guys , no offend BUT if you don't leave yer seats , you will get some KICKS in the ASS by us .
Midwest : Ow really ?!
Ed & Midwest gets up on their feat looking straight in their eyes .
JJ looks at Ryan , Ryan looks at JJ , they agree about something and ...
JJ runs at Ed , while Ryan grabs Midwest holding him in a strong CANADIAN BACK BREAKER
JJ knocks him down , grabs him on his shoulders and jumps in a ELBOW SLAM DROP on the SEATS !!!
Destroying the near by seats . Making Ed BLEED !
Ryan keeps his weak submission hold , waiting for JJ to come
JJ gets up on some upper seats
Ryan raise Midwest in the sky , slamming him on the floor !
JJ looks happy at Ryan and then JUMPS ON Midwest !!!
Making Midwest have a SERIOUSLY INJURY !!
After that JJ looks at the seats where Ed & Midwest stayed ,
Gets from his pocket a news paper and puts it on the seats ,
After that they two sit and start talking to watching the game eating chips .
Ryan : That was like a backup to tell them who they DEAL WITH !
JJ looks near and sees the Police coming .
JJ alerts Ryan .. and they two start running in the crowd , Police following them !
TO BE CONTINUE ...
Suddenly JJ's phones starts to ring .
"Its on the Highway to HELL !"
JJ : Yes ? Yea where here ? Ow no problem well come to you , yes thank you .
he drops down his phone and smashes it ...
Ryan looks curiously at him ...
JJ : Nothing .
Ryan : Well .. lets go then ? Whats the problem?
JJ : Remember our last match ? Against Ed & Midwest ?
Ryan : Yea , easy match , those guys need to learn some moves too , before learning to talk .
JJ : Its not that , even that yer right , their there too , and their sitting right next to ours .
Ryan : Ow , hah ! Lets get them evacuated .
JJ : Calm , well see there .
After some moments , getting near their seats .
Ed & Midwest when sees them starts to get closer and talking about them pointing to them.
They see them and go near Sam , but they had no where to sit ...
Ryan : Okay guys , no offend BUT if you don't leave yer seats , you will get some KICKS in the ASS by us .
Midwest : Ow really ?!
Ed & Midwest gets up on their feat looking straight in their eyes .
JJ looks at Ryan , Ryan looks at JJ , they agree about something and ...
JJ runs at Ed , while Ryan grabs Midwest holding him in a strong CANADIAN BACK BREAKER
JJ knocks him down , grabs him on his shoulders and jumps in a ELBOW SLAM DROP on the SEATS !!!
Destroying the near by seats . Making Ed BLEED !
Ryan keeps his weak submission hold , waiting for JJ to come
JJ gets up on some upper seats
Ryan raise Midwest in the sky , slamming him on the floor !
JJ looks happy at Ryan and then JUMPS ON Midwest !!!
Making Midwest have a SERIOUSLY INJURY !!
After that JJ looks at the seats where Ed & Midwest stayed ,
Gets from his pocket a news paper and puts it on the seats ,
After that they two sit and start talking to watching the game eating chips .
Ryan : That was like a backup to tell them who they DEAL WITH !
JJ looks near and sees the Police coming .
JJ alerts Ryan .. and they two start running in the crowd , Police following them !
TO BE CONTINUE ...
Last edited by Jigolo Jay on Fri Nov 20, 2009 8:07 am; edited 1 time in total
Jigolo jay- Posts : 72
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Re: Deal with It . Goes To a football match .
**OOC: errrm yea sam's not at the football game, so i'm gonna take him out and you can start over. Next time you want to use Sam in a promo you have to ask first, he is the GM of the fed after all, and he doesn't like to have people play for him, including me....if you haven't figured that out yet, he's on vacation but will be back tomorrow.
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Re: Deal with It . Goes To a football match .
UPDATED and Sorry for that .
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Re: Deal with It . Goes To a football match .
OOC: JJ can you make my writing red? i like my writing red lol
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Nice but need some improvement
Hi Guys,
I've read your out of ring story and i have some comments / Advices.
1. You need to work a little on your spelling mistakes, I truly recommend start working with Word or OneNote, it would correct you automatically when it can, otherwise you'll see the mistakes and will be able to correct them yourselves.
2. Your fighting is not real, when the last time you seen a street fight where someone has used a Canadian back breaker and an elbow slam drop, there are so many moves you can be used in real life.
When you're in the ring or back stage that's might be logical and even in this case there are more logical moves to use
3. Finally, Finally, I don’t see the button line from this RP. In my point of view and it is being reflected in my RPs. In my opinion all sections are connected to each other into a one long RP that the GM can use in his shows.
I assume that this is your major goal, to let people who watches the show enjoy your RPs and for you to find a place where you can express yourselves. Try to think long term distance as far as it concerns your RPs
I hope you'll take those into account in your next RPs.
Please don't hesitate to talk to me in case you need some ideas or any advices.
Fredy.
I've read your out of ring story and i have some comments / Advices.
1. You need to work a little on your spelling mistakes, I truly recommend start working with Word or OneNote, it would correct you automatically when it can, otherwise you'll see the mistakes and will be able to correct them yourselves.
2. Your fighting is not real, when the last time you seen a street fight where someone has used a Canadian back breaker and an elbow slam drop, there are so many moves you can be used in real life.
When you're in the ring or back stage that's might be logical and even in this case there are more logical moves to use
3. Finally, Finally, I don’t see the button line from this RP. In my point of view and it is being reflected in my RPs. In my opinion all sections are connected to each other into a one long RP that the GM can use in his shows.
I assume that this is your major goal, to let people who watches the show enjoy your RPs and for you to find a place where you can express yourselves. Try to think long term distance as far as it concerns your RPs
I hope you'll take those into account in your next RPs.
Please don't hesitate to talk to me in case you need some ideas or any advices.
Fredy.
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Re: Deal with It . Goes To a football match .
look freddy no offend , leave us alone , mind about yer business .
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Re: Deal with It . Goes To a football match .
actually JJ, that's fredy's job.
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Re: Deal with It . Goes To a football match .
hah lol =))...
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Re: Deal with It . Goes To a football match .
No P.
I was only trying to help.
My offer is still on the table, if you feel like talking about the RPs feel free.
I have planty of good idea's .
Fredy.
I was only trying to help.
My offer is still on the table, if you feel like talking about the RPs feel free.
I have planty of good idea's .
Fredy.
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Re: Deal with It . Goes To a football match .
yea freddy , get me some if you want we can talk in PM's you start it and ill reply . the deal with it team its off because ryan was fired .
Can't wait to hear from you . JJ .
Can't wait to hear from you . JJ .
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